The Official Poetry Thread...

IMHO, you used all your syllables on "sophistication" limiting you for the rest, but I may not get it

THe bridge does not necessarily have the same duration / length / number of measures than the verse.

BTW: just had a new idea, and that's something Verena would sing:



The broken rope


The broken rope
can be mended.
It might be strong again.
But the fracture remains.

It'll never be the same
as it was before.

A broken friendship
might reconcile
to old strength.
But something will remain.

It'll never be the same
as it was before.

The broken rope
carries heavy loads.
But the knot between its ends
will keep us at a distance.

It'll never be the same
as it was before.


I am still looking for an alternative word for "rope" because that's not too well suited for singing. AIFIK there is an ancient and almost unused wording:
"tow" - related to the German Tau (in the meaning of rope). But i'd guess people would hear that as "toe" - and a song on a broken toe would be quite different.

(Despite of that the idea behind the text could be mapped to the image of a "broken toe" rather easily)
 
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THe bridge does not necessarily have the same duration / length / number of measures than the verse.

BTW: just had a new idea, and that's something Verena would sing:



The broken rope


The broken rope
can be mended.
It might be strong again.
But the fracture remains.

It'll never be the same
as it was before.

A broken friendship
might reconcile
to old strength.
But something will remain.

It'll never be the same
as it was before.

The broken rope
carries heavy loads.
But the knot between its ends
will keep us at a distance.

It'll never be the same
as it was before.


I am still looking for an alternative word for "rope" because that's not too well suited for singing. AIFIK there is an ancient and almost unused wording:
"tow" - related to the German Tau (in the meaning of rope). But i'd guess people would hear that as "toe" - and a song on a broken toe would be quite different.

(Despite of that the idea behind the text could be mapped to the image of a "broken toe" rather easily)
Aaah. My brain was stuck on haiku. I would love to learn to songwrite, but I suck. Obviously, you know what you're doing !! I don't know anything-not even the terms you are using-bridge? A bridge to the verses? Time to google.
 
Here's another one from the ***Edited for foul language******Edited for foul language******Edited for foul language******Edited for foul language***-house poet...


There once was a man from Wheeling
Who felt his c*ck with such great feeling
On the tip of his c*ck
Landed a fly for a walk
And he plastered the fly to the ceiling!


;>)/
I HATE FLIES
 
OK, carry on with your limericks, lickspittles,
And Bruuuce and I will do haikus
Black, you fkn asked for haikus,
And nobody's said poop
All you want is another crayon for the bathroom walll :rolf::gotta-love:
 
I love pie...especially Apple or even yet Blueberry pie...yummy! Speaking of pie, do you like hair-pie if you know what I mean? I guess I just have a dirty mind. I hope we are still friends.

You just be yourself and feel comfortable with that. Don't let me distort you mind because you know who I am. You are a good guy always...remember that. Just be your natural self and don't let others tell you different...remember that me friend.


;>)/
I don't know if you're the Ambassador of Anarchy {I think I could do better}, but you sure are a swamp rat and I thought those were only in Louisiana. :bash:
 
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