Sapient / LiveeviL2000 Collaboration

[LiveeviL2000]

This song was originally thought up during the Game of Tonez competition. @TVvoodoo tasked us to create a full album and write the lyrics to ONE song. I missed the "ONE" part and wrote Lyrics to all 11 songs. I'd love to do them all, but probably wont happen. I'd be happy to do half of them though.
I asked @Sapient to lend me his vocals for this one because I imagined his vocals in front of this song, obviously he agreed. I set to writing all the riffs and such last weekend. Sapient did some lyrical edits and did the musical arrangement.
Here is how it was produced.
EZDrummer3
BC RIch Kerry King Warlock Tuned D#
Ibanez e605 Bass Tuned A# (finger style)
HX Stomp (bass & guitar settings)
Focusrite 2i2
Reaper DAW
Vocals: @Sapient
Guitars/Bass: @LiveeviL2000
Lyrics: @LiveeviL2000 / @Sapient
Musical Arrangement: @Sapient

Lyrics below

https://soundcloud.com/id%3Duser-529226453%252Fgenerations-11%3Btrack_id%3D1723573932

GENERATIONS

(Verse 1)
In the silence of the night, I ponder on our plight,
A world where strength and wisdom fade from sight,
Generations lost, wandering astray,
Lack of guidance leads them further every day.

(Pre-Chorus)
Once we stood tall, like mighty ancient trees,
but now we stumble, brought to our knees,
weight of uncertainty, heavy on our souls,
We need a guiding light to make us whole.

(Chorus)
generations grow weaker,
Lost without a compass, getting bleaker,
Yearning for the wisdom that once was shared,
Longing for the guidance that showed we cared

(Verse 2)
In the digital age, where screens hypnotize,
Connections lost, hearts filled with compromise,
We've forgotten the power of a guiding hand,
Lessons from the past, they help us understand.

(Pre-Chorus)
Our elders once carried the flame of insight,
Passed down their knowledge to set things right,
But now the flame flickers, its glow grows dim,
We must rekindle it and let it shine within.

(Chorus)

(Solo)

(Chorus repeat)

(Solo out)

 

[TVvoodoo]

Holy smokes! With the lyrics! Ahhh... UNBELIEVABLE!!!

 

[C-Grin]

This song was originally thought up during the Game of Tonez competition. @TVvoodoo tasked us to create a full album and write the lyrics to ONE song. I missed the "ONE" part and wrote Lyrics to all 11 songs. I'd love to do them all, but probably wont happen. I'd be happy to do half of them though.
I asked @Sapient to lend me his vocals for this one because I imagined his vocals in front of this song, obviously he agreed. I set to writing all the riffs and such last weekend. Sapient did some lyrical edits and did the musical arrangement.
Here is how it was produced.
EZDrummer3
BC RIch Kerry King Warlock Tuned D#
Ibanez e605 Bass Tuned A# (finger style)
HX Stomp (bass & guitar settings)
Focusrite 2i2
Reaper DAW
Vocals: @Sapient
Guitars/Bass: @LiveeviL2000
Lyrics: @LiveeviL2000 / @Sapient
Musical Arrangement: @Sapient

Lyrics below

https://soundcloud.com/id%3Duser-529226453%252Fgenerations-11%3Btrack_id%3D1723573932

GENERATIONS

(Verse 1)
In the silence of the night, I ponder on our plight,
A world where strength and wisdom fade from sight,
Generations lost, wandering astray,
Lack of guidance leads them further every day.

(Pre-Chorus)
Once we stood tall, like mighty ancient trees,
but now we stumble, brought to our knees,
weight of uncertainty, heavy on our souls,
We need a guiding light to make us whole.

(Chorus)
generations grow weaker,
Lost without a compass, getting bleaker,
Yearning for the wisdom that once was shared,
Longing for the guidance that showed we cared

(Verse 2)
In the digital age, where screens hypnotize,
Connections lost, hearts filled with compromise,
We've forgotten the power of a guiding hand,
Lessons from the past, they help us understand.

(Pre-Chorus)
Our elders once carried the flame of insight,
Passed down their knowledge to set things right,
But now the flame flickers, its glow grows dim,
We must rekindle it and let it shine within.

(Chorus)

(Solo)

(Chorus repeat)

(Solo out)

Holy cow dude do you sleep? That was amazing.

 

[C-Grin]

Going back for a 2nd listen man thats so good, love the tone on the guitar. The vocals are killer!!

 

[TVvoodoo]

It's a killer guitar riff there's some real attitude in it, supports the lyrics well... just a bit off-swing in a few places. The lyrics... that's really appropros, prescient, zeitgeist material there. Little more Sapient in the chorus...

 

[iblive]

That was awesome you guys. I can already hear the masses crying for more.

 

[TVvoodoo]

Seems to me this part needs to be much more important...

"We must rekindle it and let it shine within"

that last syllable should be the climax of the song...my ears want to hear it stretched out to withiiiinnnnn for a bar or two at a higher pitch as the guitar lead roars in

 

[Thatbastarddon]

Sweet!

 

[LiveeviL2000]

Thanks guys!

@Sapient really did alot to bring that to life and he was super patient with me when I was mixing everything. I still have a ways to go before I really know what I am doing.

 

[LiveeviL2000]

Holy cow dude do you sleep? That was amazing.

The simple answer ... no. I wrote almost 5 minutes of song and @Sapient cut and sniped and rearranged everything. All I did was play stuff and put the drum track together.

 

[LiveeviL2000]

That was awesome you guys. I can already hear the masses crying for more.

The crowd starts chanting (whatever our group is called)
..... Lets go with "Sapien Rex"

 

[TVvoodoo]

Well the drum track is friggin" killer too! I'd call this beat The Nasty Swuffle

 

[Sapient]

Thanks for the posts and likes fellows. It was fun to do and I was quite honored and surprised when 'Evil asked me to do this. Everything came together pretty quick and we were pretty efficient with it all, I'd say. Thanks for askin' me in to this kind sir ....Mr. 'Evil.

 

[Ramo]

Good work. Your solos are coming along nicely… guitar tones are on point and it has rock N roll attitude.

It would have been nice if vox were bit more aggressive but thats just me….

Good work fellas….

 

[Session 5]

That was FANTASTIC!! Very well done!! You guys, my hats off to you both, great work!

 

[JohnnyGoo]

HOLY poop THAT SHOULD BE ON THE RADIO YOU GUYS. Killer Riffage .Best riffs ive heard damn near since Tony Iommi. Friggin Awesome. I got to go listen again Outstanding.

 

[JohnnyGoo]

That guitar work there Liveevil is just SIC. love it. The singing is pro quality Sapient.

 

[LiveeviL2000]

Thank you for the kind words

 

[Sapient]

That guitar work there Liveevil is just SIC. love it. The singing is pro quality Sapient.

Thanks so much, Johnny. Means a lot to me that you would say that.

 

[TVvoodoo]

I listened to it again a bit more closely... and found its the kind of piece that benefis from re-listening.

Drum groove is so sick, and guitar riff has a little swing to but it needs a tad more "swagger" in a couple places to match the groove a bit better. I think just some splits and nudges might do it

"We've forgotten the power of a guiding hand,
Lessons from the past, etc..." Those two lines seem misaligned with the riff in that they don't quite match the flow... or cadence of the rest.... I think you could also split and move those to better places... a bitvlater ...not much, a beat or two... they seem rushed into place for no good reason where they sit now

The vocal "let it shine within" again should be some sort of crescendo point to my ear... perhaps going directly to guitar solo then come out of solo with pre/ chorus maybe

I want to get easy drummer now if this an example of the modern grooves included.

Overall I've been here maybe three, four years? I try to listen as much as I can from you fellas, this is one of the top three things I've heard from TTR members whether as an outside project or collaboration. It's already a diamond in my very unprofessional opinion... just a little shining up would not hurt it one bit.

You two oughtta be very proud of what you presented here. Really impressive.